Leah's Rhetoric Blog

I think personally I need to add more statistics in my results section. My peer reviews suggested a bit less of statistics because there were a lot of numbers and it was already shown in their graphs. I also think my flow could be a bit better overall. I also need to go back and fix my in-text citations as I forgot to go back and fix them. In addition, I need to explain the quotes that I found instead of just placing them in my paragraphs. I also need a good end to my paragraphs to sum it up. My paper could have been a bit more formal. I need to add more information especially in the diet section and the discussion. I didn't have an appendix section so I ned to add that. I need to go back and fix my paper to make it all APA format because I believe I messed up my reference page. For the organization of my paper I think I did a good job with separating each section and staying on that topic. My survey was also well done there were a lot of questions so I could have added more of...

comment on my writing assignment #2 here

Introduction School stress, sleep, and diet all play a factor in an athletes ability to play a sport successfully. I did my study on field hockey players in specific. I surveyed multiple field hockey players from the University of Iowa on their average sleep, diet, and school stress. This information helps me understand why these affects impact our daily lives. Now why do these things impact us so greatly? For example, if an athlete doesn't fuel their body correctly for a competition or practice we struggle by either feeling tired with no energy, or sluggish from eating a heavy meal. In addition, sleep is a huge part of success in an athlete's life. Athlete’s need to be getting proper sleep, depending on how your body works, because everyone is different, it would usually be at least eight hours of sleep per night. This helps you recharge for the next day. Lastly, school stress is a key factor because if you aren't focused at practice or a game you are constantly worryi...

I made a survey online. Here is the link: https://survey.zohopublic.com/zs/GWB3B6

I chose field hockey and some of the primary factors in your life that can impact your play for my topic proposal. This is important because many collegiate field hockey players have a lot of stress, sleep variations, and specific diets they go by. I always wanted to do a research study on other field hockey players and how these factors affect them. My first research question is, how does stress from school play a factor on how you play? Second, how does sleep impact how you play? Lastly, how does your diet impact how you play? I will be providing a survey with detailed questions to find out the affects of your average day having an impact on your play.

Field Hockey 1. How does stress from school play a factor on how you play? 2. How does sleep impact how you play? 3. How does your diet impact how you play?